Be good at listening to different voices and opinions

On October 6, I published a travel prose: "Beautiful Autumn is picturesque". Many literary websites got good responses and comments. "Reading Wenzhai Network" gave a high score of 8 or 4. "Shu Yun Literature Network" as a headline, the red title published. The editor-in-chief of the website, Yuqi teacher, highly recommended, left messages to praise, readers have a high click rate.

However, there was a comment from a literary friend named one Peanut in the Reading Literature Network, which pulled me back to reason from my joy. It caught my attention and thought. The text is well written, but it doesn't reflect your title, he said. This is the introduction of the scenic spot, not the title you said. The suggestion is very pertinent.

In fact, shortly after the article was issued, I had a premonition and worry that it was imperfect and beside the point, and I regretted that I had published it in a hurry. Sure enough, I am very grateful to you for your frankness and frankness. I immediately replied: thank you for your bluntness. I will reflect on it. Be true to your word. Then I made a deep reflection: the title of the article is the theme of this article. We should focus on showing the process and what we have seen and heard of the members of the extended family visiting the garden in October. Instead of blindly introducing scenic spots, although there is an expression of autumn beauty in the article, the weight is obviously too weak to reflect the theme of the article.

My original intention is actually a pun on the title of "an eyeful of picturesque autumn colors". Not only praise the natural and man-made scenery of the park, but also praise the family virtues of warmth and harmony in the big family, respecting the old and loving the young, that is, the realm of the unity of man and nature! The two complement each other and interact with each other. This is probably one of the reasons why this article is favored by readers. I very much agree with the teacher Bing Qingyujie's evaluation that the life of several generations is more enviable than the scenery of this botanical garden. The grandson and the old father all appeared in the author's works. Bless you! The teacher's words really hit the nail on the head. I immediately replied: thank you for your understanding and advice, the unity of man and nature is the theme of this article.

Having found the crux of the problem, I began to add a few garden tidbits. 1. Travel to the Moon Garden. When I saw the rose garden planted in a large area for the first time, I was shocked by the sea of flowers in front of me. Red, pink, yellow and white rose flowers are colorful and beautiful. 2. Description of melon and fruit corridor: the grand occasion of melon and fruit fragrance hanging all over the branches in harvest season and the expression of our joy. These two paragraphs coincide with the picturesque autumn scenery; 3. The plants of Sha Sheng Pavilion. The super cactus, cactus ball and cactus pillar are shocking, and this plant has indomitable vitality. We not only marvel at the life characteristics and form of this plant, but also symbolize that people should be like it. Strong, brave and unyielding will. The above three tidbits are only some fragments of the rich and colorful process of the garden, although there is not much ink, they play the role of the finishing touch.

At the back of the article, there are feelings and feelings about the garden, and it is also the part of the sublimation theme. It is emphasized that Chenshan Botanical Garden is not only an expo garden of plants all over the world, but also a great treasure house of horticultural art. It further illustrates the value and significance of the botanical garden which is famous and worthy of its reputation. More importantly, every member of the big family enjoys and experiences this poetic and picturesque mood in this autumn, scenic and plant tour.

After the revision of the article, the title has also been further poeticized. "the beauty of autumn is picturesque and fragrant everywhere". The prose once again meets the reader with a new face, which is really extraordinary. Once again, "Shuyun Literature Network" received rave reviews, and readers' click-through rate exceeded a thousand in three days; "China Prose Network" broke the recent low click-through rate of my article readers, and was praised by a number of teachers; "99 article net", "article reading network", "article bar" and other websites greatly exceeded the original article "Eye of Beautiful Autumn".

In the face of this situation. It makes me feel a lot of emotion. As the saying goes: a good article is revised. He reminds me of my own process and experience of art creation, and the reason is the same. It takes a lot of training to forge a good work. Excelsior, meticulous, is the basic attitude of learning. As ordinary literary writers, we should learn to be good at listening to different voices and opinions and improve our shortcomings in time. This also reminds us that our literary website is not only a platform for article exchange and display, but also a position for academic discussion and improvement. If only the literature website could open up a column for the author's reflection and revision, he would not only be able to lively academic atmosphere. It can also improve the writing level of the author and the reading ability of the reader. I think this is also one of the powerful ways to improve the level of literary websites and enhance and prosper the cultural literacy of the whole people.

Shanghai, October 15, 2018